Tutor profile: Swarnakshi S.
Moi, j’aime ma famille. Et toi, comment trouves-tu ta famille ? I like my family. And you, how do you find your family?
Moi aussi, j’aime les membres de ma famille. Je m’entends très bien avec eux car tout le monde est gentil et aimable. De temps en temps, je me dispute avec mon frère parce qu’il m’énerve, mais la plupart du temps, il est amusant et je l’aime bien. I like my family as well. I get on very well with them because everyone is kind and friendly. Sometimes I argue with my brother because he gets on my nerves, but most of the time, he is funny, and I like him.
Write about a time when you, or someone you know, were surprised.
The wind howled like a banshee turning the rain into a salvo of bullets. Was this a November day in Oxford? It was more like the monsoon season in Delhi! The roads were covered in puddles the size of small lakes. Walking along and unaware of it all was a schoolboy. Whistling as he strolled along, hands in his pockets, he was casually making his way home from school. To say he was in a dream was an understatement. He’d been let out early because of the bad weather and, although he didn’t much like either wind or rain he was in his new parka and, best of all, he was thrilled to the core at being let out of school early. That was why he was whistling. To him, it was a summer’s day! That was when it happened. A car came out of nowhere and drove right through a puddle that was doing a very good impression of a miniature lake. The water leapt up from the road with a life of its own and drenched the day-dreaming boy. He was jolted out of his reverie and stood there dazed and drenched. He didn’t know what to do, but he knew he’d be in for it when he got home. His brand new parka had turned from green to a kind of dirty khaki-brown. This would not be fun. The parka had been a very expensive present from mum and dad.
How does the writer use language to create interest for the reader in this opening to The Picture of Dorian Gray? Extract: The studio was filled with the rich odour of roses, and when the light summer wind stirred amidst the trees of the garden, there came through the open door the heavy scent of the lilac or the more delicate perfume of the pink-flowering thorn. From the corner of the divan of Persian saddle-bags on which he was lying, smoking, as was his custom, innumerable cigarettes, Lord Henry Wotton could just catch the gleam of the honey-sweet and honey-coloured blossoms of a laburnum, whose tremulous branches seemed hardly able to bear the burden of a beauty so flamelike as theirs; and now and then the fantastic shadows of birds in flight flitted across the long tussore-silk curtains that were stretched in front of the huge window, producing a kind of momentary Japanese effect, and making him think of those pallid, jade-faced painters of Tokyo who, through the medium of an art that is necessarily immobile, seek to convey the sense of swiftness and motion. The sullen murmur of the bees shouldering their way through the long unmown grass, or circling with monotonous insistence round the dusty gilt horns of the straggling woodbine, seemed to make the stillness more oppressive. The dim roar of London was like the bourdon note of a distant organ. The Picture of Dorian Gray- Oscar Wilde
The writer uses the senses to interest the reader. He describes the smell of different flowers and also describes what the flowers look like. A character is mentioned, and his name makes the reader think he might be rich. The character is lying down and smoking. The windows are described as open and huge and the curtains are made of silk. The descriptions make the setting seem very appealing; it feels like this character has lots of luxury. The room is a studio, so maybe it is a painters room with a garden outside with lots of flowers. The writer also mentions things from Japan and Tokyo, which might make the reader intrigued as it sounds exciting. There are some unusual words that might make the reader think the setting is in the past. There are some well-chosen adjectives and verbs that really create a picture in the reader's mind. These words paint a picture for the reader. There is a very long sentence in the second paragraph, followed by two shorter sentences. This helps the description flow better. There are some examples of alliteration and words connected to movement. This makes the writing more effective and interests the reader.
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