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Review the following sentences and short paragraphs. Suggest changes to improve them, both in content and grammar. 1) Jennifer and Mark is going snowboarding, they are going to have so much fun! 2) My most favorite activity is playing soccer because it's the funnest. 3) Once upon a time, there was a powerful princess named Alora. Alora wanted to go on a quest! Alora wanted to travel to a distant land. Alora made plans to invite her best friend. They traveled across the world, saw beautiful sights, and enjoyed every second of it. They want to go again next year!
1) There are 2 primary mistakes in this sentence. The first is the use of "is" in the first half of the sentence. Jen and Mark are two people, which makes them a plural subject. When this is the case, the writer will use "are" instead of "is". If the sentence said "Jennifer is going snowboarding..", this word choice would be more fitting. Second, there is not a connecting word after the comma in this sentence. If the writer wanted to use a comma, he/she would need to add a word such as "and" here. Another option would be to insert a semi-colon, as this is appropriate if a sentence includes two separate complete phrases that are connected in content. Finally, the writer could choose to simply use a period after "snowboarding" and create two sentences rather than one. 2)There are also 2 primary mistakes in this sentence. First, using the word "most" is redundant. The word favorite implies that the activity is the one that is liked the most, so there is no need to add that word. However, the word "most" SHOULD be used later in the sentence, rather than "funnest". The end of the sentence should read "...because it's the most fun" rather than "it's the funnest". 3) In this final excerpt, there are little to no issues with the grammar. However, there are word choices and formats that could be changed in order to improve the paragraph. The second, third, and fourth sentence begin with "Alora". In the first sentence, it is established that this is the princess's name. Because no other subjects are introduced yet, it can be assumed that the following sentences are referring to the same subject. Therefore, the writer could replace "Alora" with "she" and the reader would still know who was being referred to. In addition, shorter sentences about the same subject could be combined. For instance "Alora wanted to travel to a distant land. Alora made plans to invite her best friend" could be changed to "Alora wanted to travel to a distant land, and she made plans to invite her best friend." This makes the paragraph more fluid without changing clarity.
Read the following excerpt from a peer-reviewed journal article (which has been altered for this question). Based on the context, which section of the journal article is this excerpt likely from? What should the author change in order to be APA compliant? Is this study more aligned with personality psychology, social psychology, or neuroscience? The current study examined the influence of demographics and masculinity on health risk and protective behaviors in men. We hypothesize conformity to masculine norms (CMNI-46) will be associated with decreases in total health behaviors (HBI-20), and engagement in health protective behaviors, as well as increased involvement in health risk behaviors. Similar to previous studies, conformity to masculine norms (CMNI-46) is associated with health behaviors (HBI-20) (Addis and Mahalik; Courtenay, 2000b, Levant and Wimer, 2014; Levant et al., 2011; Mahalik et al., 2006; and Pleck et al., 1994). While conformity to masculine norms(CMNI-46) predicted preventive self-care, anger & stress, and substance use, it was not predictive of healthy diet or proper use of healthcare resources. These findings offer new evidence when compared with findings reported in Levant & Wimer (2014, see table three) who reported health risk and protective behaviors were not predicted by conformity to masculine norms (CMNI-46) total scores.
Based on the content of this excerpt, it is likely that it's from the Discussion section of an article. This is because it is reporting what was originally hypothesized by the authors and what overall results were found. At first glance, one may think that it is the Results section. However, the results section will always include which statistical analyses were run, the findings, and their significance. This section did not include those components. In this excerpt, there are several instances in which changes need to be made in order to be APA compliant. To begin, the first two sentences are in present tense. However, when reporting and discussing findings at the end of an article, the author should use the past tense, as the study has already been completed. Next, there are several mistakes in the citations. In the first in-text citation, there are several studies and authors cited (which is absolutely okay to do), and there are mistakes within this. "Addis and Mahalik" is missing the date/year of the study, and an ampersand ("&") should be used instead of "and". Following "Courtenay, 2000b", there should be a semi-colon rather than a comma (as shown throughout the rest of this citation). Finally, the "and" at the end of this long citation is not necessary. It should simply be a semi-colon, and then the author's name and date. Continuing through the excerpt, "anger & stress" should have the word "and" instead of "&". Ampersands are only acceptable in citations in APA style. The final change should be made in the reference to the table. In APA style, when the author directs the reader to a table, it is written as "See Table "#". To answer the final question, this study aligns more with social psychology than it does with personality psychology or neuroscience. This can be gathered from the context of this excerpt, as it is discussing how masculine norms affect men's' health behaviors. Norms and stereotypes, and the effect they have, are social subjects. If this study was personality psychology, it would possibly look at how different personality traits influence participants' health behaviors. If this was a neuroscience study, it would likely focus on the connection between health and brain-behavior.
Simplify and then solve the following equation: 6(-x+4)-4(2x+1)=-4(-2x+3)+10
The first step will be to distribute the factors in order to simplify: Left side of equation- Start with 6(-x+4) and multiply 6* (-x) and 6*4. Result: -6x+24 Next: -4(2x+1). Multply -4* 2x and -4*1. Result: -8x-4 Now combine both distributed factors: -6x+24-8x-4 Combine Like terms -14x+20 Now distribute factor on right side of equation: -4(-2x+3). Multiply -4*(-2x) and -4*3, and add 10. Result: 8x-12+10 Further Simplify by adding like terms- 8x-2 Completed simplified equation: -14x+20=8x-2 Combine like terms on either side of equation: Combine -14x and 8x by adding 8x+14x to right side of equation. Result: 22x Combine 20 and (-2) by adding on left side. Result= 22 Resulting Equation: 22=22x To get "x" alone, divide 22 on left by 22 on right. 22/22=1 Therefore, x=1
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