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Which sentence is the clearest: 1. When Amy is too tired and angry, usually at the end of the day, she yells at the people who live with her in her apartment. 2. When Amy is exhausted, she yells at her roommates. 3. Amy, when exhausted, yells at her roommates.
3. Answer number 3 begins with a subject and uses the least amount of words to get across the same point as both other answers.
Subject: College Admissions
Write about a time you overcame a hardship.
A good college essay should include a personal experience that had measurable results. For my essay, I might write about how after I lost my dad, I started taking piano lessons. I'd discuss what I learned about music and grief. I'd then talk about enrolling in AP Music Theory and the amount of studying I did to earn a 5 on the exam. Writing a good admissions essay should be broken down into 3 quintessential parts: 1. The base: come up with a good, unique idea 2. The elaboration: pick creative anecdotes that show off your skills and personality 3. The "so what": why should a reader care about what you're saying?
Place a semi-colon and a comma in the appropriate place: "The train comes in an hour if you miss it you can't get a refund."
"The train comes in an hour; if you miss it, you can't get a refund."
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