Tutor profile: Sarah S.
Vain and prone to violence, Caravaggio could not handle success: the more his (1)__________ as an artist increased, the more (2)__________ his life became. Blank 1: Blank 2: temperance tumultuous notoriety providential eminence dispassionate
Answers: eminence, tumultuous Approach: 1) What do we know about the sentence? Brainstorm. --Caravaggio is vain and prone to violence --Caravaggio cannot handle success (implies the rest of the sentence is about his success) --Mainly negative words, probably a negative sentence. 2) a) What/who is blank 1 referring to? --Who: Caravaggio --What: Caravaggio's success b) What do the blank 1 words feel like? --Temperance--calm, makes me think of the alcohol prohibition --Notoriety--being known/famous, bad --eminence--being prominent/emanating/shining, good c) Choose. --Since Blank 1 refers to success, we need a positive word. It can't be notoriety. Success is usually not a calm thing, so I'm going to go with eminence. 3) Same steps a) Who/what? --Who? Caravaggio --What? his life b) Feeling of words? --tumultuous--feels like tumbling, I picture a stormy ocean --providential--providence, God, good. --Dispassionate-- Dis= not, passionate = with feeling c) Choose: --We know that Caravaggio cannot handle success. Therefore, if his success is increasing, then this word must be negative. Dispassionate is neutral. Providential is good. Tumultuous is the best. *This approach got me a 95% on this portion of the GRE without memorizing the book.
Sample of possible student writing: Prompt: Explain how to write an introductory paragraph. Introduction are important in writing. To write an informative introduction, you should brainstorm and you should follow this formula. There are four main step to writing a clear introductory paragraph. First, you should write a specific beginning sentence that introduces your topic. Next, you write a few sentence that overview the body paragraph of your essay. Finally, you conclude by rewriting the main thesis of your essay. If you do this, your introductory paragraph should be clear and precise and your reader will have an easier time. These four steps should make any introductory paragraph a breeze!
This was a great start. However, there are some areas we need to work on together. The main areas that I see are a concern are: 1) Topic sentence Your topic sentence should be detailed and precise, how much do you know about this paragraph when I only say "Introduction are important?" 2) Plural versus singular nouns Please read this paragraph out loud. Do any words just sound weird to you? Do you read the words the same way I wrote them? Underline those words, and check every noun (person, place or thing) to see if it needs an "s". 3) Commas between independent clauses An independent clause has a subject and a verb (Ex. I run). Conjunctions like "and", "or", and "but" separate independent clauses sometimes. (Ex. I run, and I hide.) When you have two independent clauses, you need to put in a comma. Please check every sentence that has "and" in it to see if it needs another comma. Revised paragraph: (corrections capitalized) WHEN INTRODUCTIONS ARE ORGANIZED BY MAIN TOPIC, BODY PARAGRAPH TOPICS, AND THEN CONCLUSION, THEY HELP READERS TO FOLLOW THE REST OF THE ESSAY WITH EASE. To write an informative introductory paragraph, you should brainstorm, AND you should follow this formula. There are four main stepS to writing a clear introductory paragraph. First, you should write a specific beginning sentence that introduces your topic. Next, you write a few sentenceS that overview the body paragraphS of your essay. Finally, you conclude by rewriting the main thesis of your essay. If you do this, your introductory paragraph should be clear and precise, AND your reader will have an easier time. These four steps should make any introductory paragraph a breeze!
Subject: English as a Second Language
Read this passage from the Kite Runner by Khaled Hosseini: "I think that everything he did, feeding the poor, giving money to friends in need, it was all a way of redeeming himself. And that, I believe, is what true redemption is, Amir jan, when guilt leads to good." 1) Please underline every word you know. 2) Then write the feeling of each sentence. 3) What is redemption? What does this passage talk about?
1) (Underlining doesn't work on this webpage, I put "unknown" words into parentheses) I think that everything he did, feeding the poor, giving money to friends in need, it was all a way of (redeeming) himself. And that, I believe, is what true (redemption) is, Amir jan, when guilt leads to good. 2) Feeling of each sentence Sentence 1: Doing good things was a way he redeemed himself. Sentence 2: Doing good things is what true redemption is, when a bad feeling leads to good. 3) Analysis Redemption is when a bad feeling leads to good actions. This passage talks about how addressing guilt by acting in a good way leads to true redemption.
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