Tutor profile: Abbey M.
What changes would you make to improve the following sentence? Explain your reasoning. "Life for the woman in 1894, when this story was written, was nothing desirable."
"Life for women in 1894, when this story was written, was full of limitations and frustrations." The previous sentence was awkward and did not flow nicely. It also did not tell readers why life was so bad for women in 1894. This new sentence, however, tells readers why life was miserable for women. It also has a more eloquent construction.
The following question is based on the passage below: Heard melodies are sweet, but those unheard Are sweeter; therefore, ye soft pipes, play on; Not to the sensual ear, but, more endear'd, Pipe to the spirit ditties of no tone: Fair youth, beneath the trees, thou canst not leave Thy song, nor ever can those trees be bare; Bold Lover, never, never canst thou kiss, Though winning near the goal - yet, do not grieve; She cannot fade, though thou hast not thy bliss, For ever wilt thou love, and she be fair! How would you describe the theme of this stanza?
Imagination enhances life
When writing, we want to show readers evidence that supports our argument rather than telling them. How would you change the following sentence to accomplish this goal? The barista did not care about his customers.
The barista neglected to acknowledge customers as they entered the coffee shop, indicating his clear lack of interest.
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