Tutor profile: Alina A.
Recall a time when you wrote out an outline for an essay. Think about some of the ways your outline might have differed from others you've seen. Did you use short bullet points or sentences? How much information did you include for the introduction or conclusion? Explain what parts of the outline worked for you and what parts you'd change in future outlines.
My last outline was a mix of bullet points and sentences. I only used bullet points in my introduction and conclusion sections and they helped me focus on what I needed to cover without stopping my flow of writing. In the other sections, I used full sentences because I included all the quotes I wanted to use. I think finding my quotes before starting to write was really helpful, but in the future I'd want to do short bullet points for everything besides the quotes. I think that would be the best way for me to write efficiently so I don't have to look up quotes or pause to read lots in my outline.
Subject: College Admissions
When you're entering your extracurriculars on the Common App, you want to emphasize your responsibilities in each position and give examples. Even if you assume the admittance board knows what was involved, you want to use these sections to show them. For example, instead of saying "I was on varsity for my school's volleyball team for a year," write "I was selected to be a varsity member by my volleyball coach for the 2020-2021 year. As a varsity member, I attended every practice, helped teach the younger players, and played in five of our six games." Write two sentences in this way talking about being the secretary for your school's photography club.
I joined the photography club in my freshman year and was elected as the secretary in my junior year. As the secretary, I fielded all of the emails we received, took detailed notes of our meetings, and created monthly newsletters to share with the club.
On pages 134 and 135 of "Animal Farm," Orwell writes about the Seven Commandments being changed to just one and the new behavior of the pigs the next day. Why did Orwell write "that it did not seem strange when the next day" the pigs started acting differently?
I think he said it wasn't strange because the pigs had been trying to claim power over the other farm animals for quite some time. The new commandment was "ALL ANIMALS ARE EQUAL BUT SOME ANIMALS ARE BETTER THAN OTHERS," and the pigs had decided that they were better than the other animals. They felt they were entitled to acting differently than the rest of the farm and starting to act like the humans who mistreated them did.
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